Hi!I'm a girl from China.I like to do some things.I like to study,play sports,and read.I like to play volleyball,tennis,and basketball and some interesting sports.I thing playing sports is good for my health.
I like watching movies very much.Do you know the famous movies called Harry Potter?I really like them.I watch all the movies,and I have all the books.Harry Potter can make me very happy.
I like animals.I really want to buy a dog.But takeing care of the dog is difficult.So my mother doesn't like the dog and doesn't buy a dog for me.
I like American food.It's delicious.I like the tomatoes,cola,coffee,and yogurt.
My favorite subjects are English and math.So I want to improve my English in the U.S.That will be interesting.
I think I can improve my English this summer.What a great summer!I can't wait!
Hi! You have a post with many interesting details, and descriptive language. I like the way you ask a question about Harry Potter. This is a good way to hold a reader's attention. (I like Harry Potter, too.) Here are some suggestions for your writing:
ReplyDelete1. You wrote "I thing play sports...." It would be better to write: I think playing sports is good....
2. You wrote "But take care of the dog is difficult." Better: But taking care of a dog is difficult.
You used many examples. I'd like to read more about your opinions!
Thank you! Post #1 grade = 96
Hi! I love your post because it's very interesting and exciting. And I love Harry Potter too! =) Maybe, We can talk more about Harry Potter someday. Let me know when we can chat about it.XD!
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