On 7-26-11.My friends and I went kayaking.It was a fun day.And the weather was cool.
There were 13 people went kayaking.I was originally without a partner.But luckily,Liam helped me.So Liam was my partner.
In the lake,we saw many cute ducks and swans.The white swans was very beautiful.Liam and I said a lot of words.I improved my English and knew something interesting about Liam.Liam recommended to me a movie.I will watch it on my free time.There are some tall reeds.If without Liam's help.Liam I'm sure I will get lost.And with Liam's help.I didn't get wet when I went kayaking in the lake.
There were 13 people went kayaking.I was originally without a partner.But luckily,Liam helped me.So Liam was my partner.
In the lake,we saw many cute ducks and swans.The white swans was very beautiful.Liam and I said a lot of words.I improved my English and knew something interesting about Liam.Liam recommended to me a movie.I will watch it on my free time.There are some tall reeds.If without Liam's help.Liam I'm sure I will get lost.And with Liam's help.I didn't get wet when I went kayaking in the lake.
But When I went ashore after.I wanted to help a man put a paddle on a kayak.When I saw a piece of water with lichen.I thought the piece of water is ground.So I stood on it.Then my pants got wet... ...That's terrible.
I had a really great time,although I got wet!
This post is very descriptive and you use so many good details I felt like I was there with you. Too bad you got wet! I have some suggestions for your writing:
ReplyDelete1.You wrote: "The white swan was very beautiful. He and I said a lot of words." So, were you talking English with the swan? I think you were talking with Liam, not the swan. That part was a little bit confusing.
2. You could say: I was originally without a partner.
Your story made me smile. Grade= 100 = A